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Character Mannerisms: Walking

By Terry C. Misfeldt

Writers often overlook an important aspect of developing their characters. Playwrights have a certain description of their actors in mind when they craft their play. One might have a limp or be blind in one eye and the people who portray those characters may not be lame or blind but they can imitate those characteristics.

In a novel, however, authors forget to describe how their protagonist or antagonists walk. An individual I remember distinctly from my hometown had a distinctive hop step with one leg that was unforgettable. Writers can create an interesting experience for their readers in describing how their characters walk.

Someone who has been overweight most of their lives might have a bow-legged waddle to help their bear the excess weight. Likewise, if the character has lost most of that weight, they may still exhibit a modified waddle when they walk.

If you observe someone who walks a lot, they often have muscular but skinny legs and stride with an air of confidence. Maybe they have a bounce in their step or seem to be someone who could burst into a run at any moment.

Does the character have a bad knee? Weak ankle? Do they favor one leg over the other? Do they shuffle their feet? Walk erect or slumped over? Does someone wearing high heels seem comfortable walking in them, or awkward?

There are numerous variables in describing how a character walks. A hunter may use stealthy techniques to move through the woods. Stalking steps might also describe a predatory human. Short, sure steps may be used by an individual trying to navigate icy conditions. Tip toeing through the house to avoid detection when coming home late is another way of describing a teenager or cheating spouse.

Suggestion: Pay attention to how people you meet or see in your daily activities walk. Make some notes and adapt those mannerisms to your characters.

Character Descriptions

By Terry C. Misfeldt

How you craft descriptions of your characters is an important element in gaining and maintaining reader interest in your story. Character descriptions vary from quick sketches to detailed revelations that can include emotional states.

An example of a quick sketch would be describing a female character wearing a sleeveless top with colorful tattoo sleeves from shoulder to wrist on both arms. Main character? Perhaps, but more appropriate for a passing stranger in some scene.

The more detailed character description might be something like this: “The plump four-year-old towhead with sparkling blue eyes and out-turned feet plodded barefoot through the mud with his tossled hair clinging to the back of his sweaty neck. His bleeding hand was wrapped in his blood-soaked t-shirt that he held tight to his chest with his belly hanging over the waistband of his too-tight shorts.”

The point of the examples is writers need to create believable characters with precise descriptions. The scene in the second example is used more to describe what might be going on in the towhead’s brief existence, but you learn he is blond with blue eyes and is overweight for a 4-year-old.

Beware: You can divulge too much information about a character in a single description or scenario. This may force you to repeat traits or descriptions at other points in your story that could potentially conflict with your original picture of them.

Suggestion: Identify your characters and write character descriptions on each of them before you dig too deeply into writing the story. This enables you to sprinkle some of their traits throughout the story at appropriate times rather than all at once.

Observe people who may model the type of character you want to create. Take notes about how they move, what they wear, and, of course, what they look like. Writers call it research.